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this was very disjointed. Shudder in this feeling of mine. Shudder. I would suggest you cut the extra "shudder". It doesn't hold dramatic effect.

Sometimes things are funny, sometimes they are annoying. Right now I feel very dry on laughter.

This had a riddle in every line, and was a challenge on me to read, for I was constantly puzzling it together. But it was short, and I actually enjoyed ...

I liked this, and I can't explain why. I apologize for just...you know...giving you a useless comment and wasting a little smitch of internet space.

I found this "cute" in a sense. I loved the constant brown overtone. Only one question - the astericks or stars or whatever....what is their purpose?

i thought this was beautiful. i love the images, mainly near the end...the first stanza was a bit forced, like a list, but i enjoyed it, nonetheless. please keep writing ...

I personally thought this was beautiful. I love your newly expanded vocabulary, and the images keep my enrapt. Dark is not always a bad thing, as it can breed the ...

She'll love it...are you from england, because in America it isn't until May... But yes, I can assure you any reasonable mother will enjoy this fully.

Very true. Nothing to say in the point of poetry, because I doubt your going for any laurels here - just, perhaps, a passing grade.

Read all TheyCallMeMimi has to say, and then ditch this. You can do so much better. And please don't repeat "EXTERMINATE" over and over again in any more of your ...

This was beautiful as it is, but I must agree - if only you would write more. The color of ROY G BIV hurt my eyes. just saying hha...

This had a beautiful, wispy feeling to it until right here: With its wise snore. Snore? It's so "un-airy". And how do you have a wise snore, anyway? Otherwise, beautiful ...

beautiful images. i definitely enjoyed the ending. not much to say, but i think your poetry is improving. deborah is also (besides from the bible) my mom's name. *shudders*

thank, zany. that helped a lot

i admit that i found this rather average, cardboard cut and dull. pershaps you can expand on this vision of black and white love to something more eloquent and poetic.